Neil Antilla
Wednesday, August 10, 2011
DO U LIKE WHAT I WROTE?
Awesome! I only have one suggestion, change 'that wasn't the bad part' to 'that wasn't even the worst part' or 'worse still' because I'd say her parents being snatched by some sea demon is pretty bad. ;)
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